Colorado Technical University

Can someone please critique my resume?

CAREER OBJECTIVE: To obtain a position with growth potential and professional development with a company. EDUCATION: University of Maryland, College Park, Maryland Bachelor of Science in Marketing, 2007 Baltimore City Community College, Baltimore, Maryland Associate of Science in Apparel Retailing, 2002 EXPERIENCE: M•A•C Cosmetics, Wheaton, Maryland Freelance Makeup Artist, 2005 - 2008 Developed loyal clientele and increased sales through personal attention to customers’ needs. Organize displays to correspond with current promotions. Drive revenue by communicating and demonstrating benefits of cosmetics. Take daily inventory and input requisitions into database. Federal Emergency Management Agency, Hyattsville, Maryland Human Service Representative GS 7, 2002 - 2004 Contacted applicants via telephone to assist in rectifying problems related to federal aid. Screened and interviewed applicants for temporary housing, home damages, personal property loss, and car damages. Maintained confidential client information and trained new hires. Consistently received excellent performance reviews. COMPUTER SKILLS: Proficient in Microsoft Office, Word, Excel and PowerPoint. REFERENCES: Available upon request

Public Comments

1. Not bad but however, every time you send the resume to a new company be specific not just development with a company. Use -To obtain a position with growth potential and professional development within the Walmart Corporation (What ever company your applying for) Make sure you write within not develope with a. Bold-------- M•A•C Cosmetics,Federal Emergency Management Agency. And then enter a space after that line
2. I'm just giving you the critiques I would have gotten in my resume writing class: Your career objective is too vague. Be more specific. Make sure all your headers line up (which they look like they are), the city and state need to be lined up as well so that it is easier to read, and make the description into bulletin points (it will be easier to read). Remember, you've got 8 seconds to catch the eye of a potential employer. Make it easy to read. Also, I would get rid of the computer skills part. Almost every potential employer assumes that all their applicants know word, excel, and powerpoint.
3. Looks good except the references available upon request. Resumes shouldn't have that part because it is assumed that if you aced your interview then your interviewer would want references to check out what type of employee you were. Would anyone want to hire a lazy bum? No. Some people think that putting that on a resume is assuming that your future employer is a dummy.So, delete that.